miércoles, 10 de septiembre de 2008

essay- intermediate11

Nelly Palomino...correction
I have two friends, my friend Kelly and Rosita, they have similarities and differences.Both of my friends are similar en some things. One thing my friend has in common is they are very serious, but they have funny moments. Both of my friends always advice me. They like to dance rock music but they prefer to listen romantic music.One similarity is that they wear black close. Well Both of my friends prefer to go to the beach in their free time.One important difference is their ages. Kelly is 20 years old and Rosita is 45 years old. Rosita is a mature person and Kelly only wants to fun. On the other hand Rosita works and she takes good care of herself and her family. Kelly only studies and I think is not responsible like Rosita. In contrast to Kelly who is a spoiled girl.Finally, I think they are my friends because they are interesting persons, they are important for me because i learn some different things of Rosita and Kelly. Also, they are in my bad and good moments. Kelly is a young like me and Rosita is a mother like me too. Also because they think similar to me.

1 comentario:

icpnablogs dijo...

Correct the following please:

to friends,kelly study,my friend have,botf of my frieds always advice me and give me the same advices???
cumbia music,to listen...romantic music, wear black close, don`t know why???, puntuation, is very mature person, only want to fun???Rosita work, Kelly study learn of them, some things of both, is a young, is mother,I serious, I funny,
This writing needs to have:
1. An Introduction Paragraph: there is none
2. A Body Parag. explaining in detail your thougts.Which you have, but with a lot of mistakes
3 Conclusion:there is no conclusion paragraph.

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